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There is a place.. by ~LittleLottexo:iconLittleLottexo:



There is a place where balloons end up after they slip out of the hands of a little girl as she grasps for the string that slowly drifts further beyond her reach. Sometimes, balloons just become untied and slowly float away until they are out of sight.

Haven't you ever wondered where balloons end up once they easily glide out of the hands of lovers, friends, families? A place where moonlight shivers as it touches lost memories and licks the sweet shining fantasies only to be poisoned. So beautiful, so deadly. Memories like mercury in the moonlight.

There is a place sound goes when there isn't a soul around to hear it. A place rain falls and water rushes and trees snap. The air is thick and tastes of soft violets. Mirrors reflect space and the sky expands with the blink of an eye, opening the ground beneath you to a place you never knew existed.

That is where I live.

There is no Sun here. Light comes and goes. I live in the shadows of others light. When someone blows out a candle, the sky is lit up with a bright fiery breath that slowly fades into dust. That's how I ended up here. I was blown out, just like a candle. I was invisible to everyone but the one who destroyed me, and now I am born of the ashes that poison me. My hair ties me to this world, my skin doesn't let me leave. This is who I am.

The balloons stay for a long time. I can smell their sweet intoxicating memories. A first trip to a carnival, a celebrated birthday, the welcome of new life, the woes of an ended one. I once tried to reach for one of them, but my hand shriveled before me. I can't touch memories that aren't mine, nor can I make them. I don't know what death is. Perhaps it's where I am now. Or maybe I'm just somewhere in between, brushed off by the world like so many have been before me.

When a balloon pops, my world shifts into darkness. A current rushes through the air like the electricity on your lips of newly discovered chemistry. My heart quakes underneath my skin and for a moment slides out from my body and I am left a lifeless form, engulfed by a lost memory. Lately, more balloons have been popping and withering away. Forgotten memories litter the grounds, the only thing I know to call home. People are forgetting. And I'm bound to the place that pumps the life-giving poison to my veins. I wonder if this place used to be beautiful. It seems I've forgotten…
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Hmmm.

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EDIT:: woww. A DD? I'm stunned. :rose:
Thank you to `Beccalicious for suggesting me
And to ^StJoan for the feature
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Daily Deviation, 2008-01-19

Daily DeviationA delicate start to what may possibly unfold into an epic fantasy tale, There is a place.. by ~LittleLottexo is an introduction that hooks the reader and gives a simple floaty object an enchanting twist. (Suggested by `Beccalicious and Featured by ^StJoan)

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you have fulfilled my fantasy need for the day, in a lovely way that's easy to digest.
There is a fantastic hook in your first sentence that really entices the reader in- this is a great opening!

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absolutely fantastic meg, i think i wont have to beat you this upcoming friday because i am so pleased. but then again there was a line that implied that balloons were at funerals ..and it reminds me of this business i want to start ..becaiuse everyone is always saying they want to have a party when they die instead of a boring funeral ...so i think im going to throw parties for the dead and my slogan will be "We put the FUN into FUNeral!!!!" a line form one of my favortire poems... but i still can't think of a name for the business.... *shrugs* BUT THIS ..SINCE YOU'VE REMI9NDED ME OF IT.. MEANS I GET TO BEAT YOU THIS FRIDAY! ....BUT I DOOOONT KNOW WHY!

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Grr.
YESSS!
I am free!
Erm.

ahahahaa. I thought people might see that as funerals and I meant retirement, but the character wouldnt really understand what retirememnt is so I just left it (:

WHY HAVENT I READ THIS POEM.
No you don't. Not if I come up with a nifty name for it before then. And I think I'm going to read this in spun next week since my poetry has all be unfinished lately.

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Super angsty hero of supreme megness!
Oh wow, thank you so much :hug:

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Super angsty hero of supreme megness!
I should sell easily digestible writings to people with intestinal problems.

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Super angsty hero of supreme megness!
Hello there

This piece of work has been featured as a HotLit! Check out the news article here: [link]

Thank you :)

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Incredible imagery and imagination. Enchanting work. :D

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D: That's REALLY good! You deserve the DD, congratulations!

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Wistful. Congratulations on the DD. It seems more of a prose-poem to me than fiction (because of the richness of imagery and the absence of plot), and its richness of imagery. Maybe something like a vignette, sort of.

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