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There is a place where balloons end up after they slip out of the hands of a little girl as she gropes for the string that slowly drifts further beyond her reach. Sometimes, balloons just become untied and slowly float away until they are out of sight.

Haven't you ever wondered where balloons end up once they easily glide out of the hands of lovers, friends, families? A place where moonlight shivers as it touches lost memories and licks the sweet shining fantasies only to be infected. So beautiful, so deadly. Memories like mercury in the moonlight.

There is a place sound goes when there isn't a soul around to hear it. A place rain falls and water rushes and trees snap. The air is thick and tastes of soft violets. Mirrors reflect space and the sky expands with the blink of an eye, opening the ground beneath you to a place you never knew existed.

That is where I live.

There is no Sun here. Light comes and goes. I live in the shadows of others' light. When someone blows out a candle, the sky is lit up with a bright fiery breath that slowly fades into dust. That's how I ended up here. I was blown out, just like a candle. I was invisible to everyone but the one who destroyed me, and now I am born of the ashes that poison me. My hair ties me to this world, my skin doesn't let me leave. This is who I am.

The balloons stay for a long time. I can smell their sweet intoxicating memories. A first trip to a carnival, a celebrated birthday, the welcome of new life, the woes of an ended one. I once tried to reach for one of them, but my hand shriveled before me. I can't touch memories that aren't mine, nor can I make them. I don't know what death is. Perhaps it's where I am now. Or maybe I'm just somewhere in between, brushed off by the world like so many have been before me.

When a balloon pops, my world shifts into darkness. A current rushes through the air like the electricity on your lips of newly discovered chemistry. My heart quakes underneath my skin and for a moment, it slides out from my body and I am left a lifeless form, engulfed by a lost memory. Lately, more balloons have been popping and withering away. Forgotten memories litter the grounds, the only thing I know to call home. People are forgetting. And I'm bound to the place that pumps this life-giving poison to my veins. I wonder if this place used to be beautiful. It seems I've... forgotten...


Hmmm.

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EDIT: woww. A DD? I'm stunned. :rose:
Thank you to `Beccalicious for suggesting me
And to ^StJoan for the feature
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Given 2008-01-19
A delicate start to what may possibly unfold into an epic fantasy tale, There is a place.. by ~LittleLottexo is an introduction that hooks the reader and gives a simple floaty object an enchanting twist. ( Suggested by BeccaJS and Featured by StJoan )
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akky3210 Featured By Owner Jul 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
WOAH...
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eminery Featured By Owner Nov 26, 2010  Student Traditional Artist
This is beautiful! The imagery is absolutely stunning, you are a very talented writer!
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GratiasDomine Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2010  Student Writer
cracking work! really well written! thanks!
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FruitnLoops Featured By Owner May 18, 2010  Student Filmographer
It can be therapeutic to read poetry sometimes, the words flow so well in a good poem. This was a wonderfully written piece.
Thank you for writing it.
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Ganymede314 Featured By Owner Apr 8, 2010   Writer
A beautiful idea. :D
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Kmn483 Featured By Owner Dec 12, 2009
Amazing! It rocks, and is very puzzling. I love it.
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althea403 Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2009
This is simply beautiful, I love it!
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SomniumShadow Featured By Owner May 29, 2009   Writer
Wow, that's just amazing! You're a wonderful writer!
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner May 31, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you (:
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ashay1089 Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2009  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
very mysterious, and lyrical.
wonderful:)
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you (:
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Ragnaroxxor Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009
holy shit.

this is the most amazing piece of text I've ever read.
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:
You are too sweet.
Thank you :heart:
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Furretsu Featured By Owner Nov 25, 2008
Absolutely enchanting.
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Dec 26, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
why thank you!
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Susan-Stohelit Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2008
thats so beautiful!
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youu (:
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Susan-Stohelit Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008
no worries
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Desert-Lilly Featured By Owner Oct 1, 2008
I can't remember whether I commented on this or not, but I have to say that this is one of the most amazing things I've ever read. I must read the rest, now. I MUST.
What's interesting is that I wrote something with extraordinarily similar imagery a long time ago, (I even wrote a line about memories slipping away like balloons) and I was so pleased with it. And then I read this, and slinked off in shame. I never looked at that passage the same way again.
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank you!
That's so interesting, that we wrote about such similar things without ever having seen the other's work. Is the story on your dA page? I'd love to read it.
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Desert-Lilly Featured By Owner Oct 2, 2008
It's not yet, but I'll be pleased to put it up for you. Just promise me you won't laugh at my sorry attempt. =D
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roxxie567 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2008
sweet i love it!! where is she? i want to know! *goes to find other parts*
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
(:
Thank you!
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MahouTragicQueen Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2008
It is a very beautiful story. I love the unique idea behind it and your description really brings it to life.
I did however notice a small mistake. "After they slip out the hands of a little girl" should be "after they slip out of the hands of a little girl."

Also, thank you for the comment and fav on my piece.
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank youuu oh so much!
And wow, I'm surprised no one noticed that. Thank you again (:

you're welcome!
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telobbblu Featured By Owner Jul 19, 2008  Hobbyist Photographer
it's so nice *.*
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
why thank you (:
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The-Romanticist Featured By Owner Jun 17, 2008
Splendid, truly splendid. You are an amazing writer. I was hooked in the first sentence. "There is a place sound goes when there isn't a soul around to hear it." Sentences like that were so unique, it is powerful enough to make even the dullest of minds stop and wonder.

Beautiful. :XD:
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jun 23, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! I'm still always shocked at how many people have said such nice things (:
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needpictures Featured By Owner May 31, 2008
Amazing idea!
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank youuu (:
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Shadowmaniac Featured By Owner May 28, 2008
Wow ... this one just makes me ... to be honest, I really don't know what kind of feeling I get from this poem. I feel a little bit happy, no, not happy, more like content, because I simply like skies and clouds, and I get this "cloudfeeling". But it also gives me some vibes of sadness and sorrow. Though it's beatiful, so I would say that it's sad but beautiful. Just as I like it ^^

The words are really beautiful and paint a picture when I read them, and the whole poem is easy to read without anything that makes me reread anything to understand it (I'm Swedish so English isn't my first language). Though I have to think about it for a while, but it's not because I don't understand the words, it's because I want to understand the symbolism. And it's a good thing when a poem makes you stop and think, beacuse that shows quality and make you remember the poem after you have read it.

Can I ask you how you choose to interpret the poem? It is interesting to know how the author thinks about her or his own works ^^

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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner May 28, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, thank you so much for the kind words. I appreciate it so much.

My interpretation?
Well, to be honest, this story evolved as I wrote it and I think it was entirely subconscious. The idea is something that has bothered me for a very long time: People hear about a cause, a problem in the world, and are moved to do somethign about it but get caught up in life and forget about it. What happens to the people who are forgotten? I want people to think about it. Without a past, people have to future. That was my idea of balloons. Lost memories.
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Shadowmaniac Featured By Owner Jun 2, 2008
You're welcome ^^

Hmm ... that sounds really interesting. I think that I've never thought about that, but you really have a great idea abouth the whole thing. Just keep writing (and thinking), and I'm sure that you'll become someone great someday.
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Jun 6, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
aww thankyouuu. Your words mean a lot (:
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fauxgravity Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2008
fragmented, pretty. i like the way that the initial imagery carries on through the piece, so that there is the unusual juxtaposition of your wistful Gothic prose and the crayola colours of the balloons. i'd personally give this piece a bit of weeding but overall it's nicely done.
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner May 1, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
why thank you! I do love the words you chose (:
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Kajuah Featured By Owner Apr 9, 2008   Interface Designer
I love your writing
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Apr 15, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
aww thank you!
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
really good....i like it a lot! nice job and keep up the great work!
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
thankyouuu! I really do appreciate it (:
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emokid07 Featured By Owner Apr 5, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
you definitely totally welcome!
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squanpie-lit Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008   Photographer
haha, Becca beat me to it. I just came accross this piece, and was thinking, hmm, this looks like DD material. Then I found that it had already been featured :D
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Apr 3, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
aww well I do appreciate you liking it!
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squanpie-lit Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2008   Photographer
well, it's a good piece :)
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breakthatfall Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2008  Student General Artist
I love the imagery, especially "Memories like mercury in the moonlight." :heart: keep it up!
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LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Why thank you.
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ragdoll89 Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2008
Amazing imagery, you've captured something beautiful and difficult to portray perfectly. Such a brilliant concept. =)
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:iconlittlelottexo:
LittleLottexo Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2008  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much! I appreciate your words more than you know.
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Hopeless-Muse Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2008  Student General Artist
That is just amazing!
It actually reminds me of this book I read; A Place Called Here by Cecila Adhern. Have you read it?

Real awesome.
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